Thursday, January 16, 2020
One Small Step For Man
One Small Step for Man
By Jaren
Poem:
First that I touched the moon, It gave me chills,
It floats my body like a magician show, I fly
so high like a pigeon bird, It feels so light,
I can hardly breathe, I jump so high like
a trampoline, it's fun for you and me.
Thanks for reading my blog and please give me some feedback
and some things I need to work on cause I'm not good at poems.
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Mōrena Jaren!
ReplyDeleteWell done on completing another activity! I'm so pleased that you've continued to blog with us over the last few weeks. We (the Summer Learning Journey Blog Commenters) really enjoy reading your posts. :)
What a great little poem! I really like how you've used lots of similes - they really help the reader imagine what you imagine being on the moon would be like. If you were given the opportunity do you think you'd like to go to space and travel to the moon?
Have a wonderful day, Jaren. I'm excited to read more of your posts soon. :)
Mā te wā,
Mikey