Super power writing by Jaren
In a late morning in 8:56 am I woke up of a feeling of a dazzling shock then I got
up and ran to the door and accidentally trip over in the stair then body began
shaking hard.I was so confused,I didn't even felt a pain in my body so,I was
probably imagining things so im I got up and eat my breakfast. When I was in
school my friends were telling me if I had super strength,I felt weird.Then my
friend Adrian came up to me and told me about super strength I felt so strange
about me,he said if super powers exist,I didn’t believe him. Then all of a sudden
there was person named nelson and ran like a cheetah and tried to punch me in
the stomach but then he felt some pain in his fist so I tried to grab his fist softly
but then he flew to the ground speedy as flash.The rest of the people felt so
surprise about me even my friends too.Then one person touch my hand then
fainted easily,and all the rest of the children faint even my teacher fainted
except for my friends,I had the most weirdest day of my life.
up and ran to the door and accidentally trip over in the stair then body began
shaking hard.I was so confused,I didn't even felt a pain in my body so,I was
probably imagining things so im I got up and eat my breakfast. When I was in
school my friends were telling me if I had super strength,I felt weird.Then my
friend Adrian came up to me and told me about super strength I felt so strange
about me,he said if super powers exist,I didn’t believe him. Then all of a sudden
there was person named nelson and ran like a cheetah and tried to punch me in
the stomach but then he felt some pain in his fist so I tried to grab his fist softly
but then he flew to the ground speedy as flash.The rest of the people felt so
surprise about me even my friends too.Then one person touch my hand then
fainted easily,and all the rest of the children faint even my teacher fainted
except for my friends,I had the most weirdest day of my life.
Nice story Jaren
ReplyDeleteI like the the way you put a cool pictrue in now could you put the date and when it
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Ok I will
DeleteThe way the cool picture show what the story is about.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dylan for your support.
DeleteIncredible work Jaren it is very cool and I like that picture a lot but next time you can start your story with "Early in the morning at 8:56 am I...".
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Deleteyou did a wonderful job on your writing. maybe next time you could fix up your grammar. I did my superpower writing on a similar thing. From Brad
ReplyDeleteThanks Brad for the reminder.
DeleteHey Jaren,
ReplyDeleteI am Andrew and I am from Hornby Primary School. I like the way you write your story. When I readed your post I learnt that we need to make your story interesting by adding more adjectives. To Improve , you could put an ending to the blog post asking us to leave a comment.Why did you write this ?